tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5066850927208074240.post3123271661898925807..comments2022-07-23T13:36:29.269-04:00Comments on Writing about Reading and Writing: Show, Don't TellKatie Sweetinghttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16712942831456914494noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5066850927208074240.post-50068602357843895402012-08-16T22:16:08.647-04:002012-08-16T22:16:08.647-04:00Except for the "This is how it opened" ...Except for the "This is how it opened" beginning, I seem to like No 1 better. <br /><br />It was not an easy pick. I assumed that the details in No 2 are not relevant to the plot, which is why you offered option 1. <br /><br />I think unnecessary details can be a distraction, knowing how limited our attention span can be, but that is just me!<br /><br />Good Luck!<br />Christina Victor-Bandyopadhyaynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5066850927208074240.post-37023434698651895472012-07-12T16:26:21.024-04:002012-07-12T16:26:21.024-04:00I don't know why, but I like the first one bet...I don't know why, but I like the first one better...maybe because I read it first...or that it gets right to the point.<br /><br />Guess you'll have a lot of differing opinions on this one.<br /><br />Bonne chance,<br />CarolineCaroline OConnellhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09909339998886374347noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5066850927208074240.post-8304743953589320482012-07-11T19:13:46.715-04:002012-07-11T19:13:46.715-04:00The second paragraph is MUCH better!!!!!!!!!
Candy...The second paragraph is MUCH better!!!!!!!!!<br />CandyceAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com